How to write excellent room descriptions

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Use the 5 tips in this guide to write excellent room descriptions for your text-based game! Also includes prompts and ideas for writing city and wilderness areas.


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    Today’s post contains tips on how to write excellent room descriptions for your text-based game.

    The advice is especially applicable to multi-user dungeons (MUDs) but may also be useful for CYOAs and other roleplaying and writing games.

    What is a room description?

    In the context of text-based games, a room description is simply a description of a physical space in the game world.

    Thus, a room isn’t always an indoor area with four walls and a roof. A room can represent any area, large or small, that player characters (PCs) might enter and interact with.

    Descriptions of rooms are important because they help add depth to the game world while fueling the imagination.

    A room doesn’t even have to be a physical space, for that matter! In a cyberpunk or fantasy game, it can represent a place in a digital world or dream world, for example.

    With that in mind, let’s start by defining what makes an excellent room description.

    I’ll then provide some building tips, as well as some writing ideas to get your creative juices flowing.

    By the end of this post, you should know how to describe a room in writing and in a way that makes sense for your game and audience.

    What makes an excellent room description?

    Unless you’re building your own game from scratch, there’s a fair chance that the game you’re working on already has some sort of builder’s manual. Many games do.

    If it includes a style guide, that’s the best place to start, as style and expectations can differ from game to game.

    For example, some game admins prefer that you avoid writing in the second person.

    Others might insist that you don’t write about the weather, as the game might already have a system for handling weather effects.

    And of course, there’s always one’s personal opinion on what sounds best.

    As for myself, I would argue that an excellent room description is…

    1. consistent in tone and style with other rooms in the area
    2. free of typos, mistakes, and grammatical errors
    3. doesn’t assume or force a reaction from player characters
    4. follows the rule of “show, don’t tell” and minimizes meta
    5. includes a unique feature or detail

    To write outstanding room descriptions according to these principles, simply follow the 5 tips below:

    1. Keep it consistent

    Nothing says “sloppy” like a zone that’s figuratively all over the place in style and tone.

    Here’s how to handle each:

    Overall style

    I tend to think it’s generally okay if an area has its own unique flair, and in many games, that’s expected.

    After all, building for a multi-user dungeon (MUD) is a time-intensive volunteer effort.

    Why wouldn’t you want your builders to create something special that interests them and includes their personal touch?

    Even so, the rooms within that area should be consistent with each other and with the game’s overarching theme, or players won’t know what to make of them. They’ll be turned off or, worse, confused. They might not bother reading anything else in the area, and the work will have been in vain.

    To prevent that from happening, make sure you’re following the game’s style guide as you build out each room. Follow the preferred point of view (first, second, or third), and avoid mix-and-matching.

    For example, if your game is played in the third person, it might seem weird and off-putting to randomly include the second person (“You see a…”) in your descriptions.

    If your game doesn’t have a style guide yet, building your first area is the perfect time to put one together! You’ll be able to flesh out a few bullet points as you decide what works best for your game. Then, it’s simply a matter of sticking to the rules you’ve laid out.

    Tone and ambiance

    Technical aspects aside, you’ll also want to pick a particular tone and convey a certain ambiance. Ask yourself what kind of emotions you want to evoke in your readers.

    Do you want them to get goosebumps? Feel warm and cozy? Lost and disoriented? Wary?

    Make a list. As you write out your room descriptions, refer back to it. This will help you stay focused on your original goals and ensure a more consistent tone throughout the area.

    2. Spellcheck and proofread

    Typos and grammatical errors can also make a game seem sloppy.

    Not only that, they can be confusing for players. Did you write “west” when you meant “east”?

    To avoid sending players on a wild goose chase, make sure you proofread your room descriptions for mistakes. Keep in mind that a spellchecker is handy for preventing typos, but it won’t catch everything.

    If your client doesn’t include a built-in spellchecker, there are plenty of free browser-based options. Grammarly is extremely popular, for example, and includes a browser extension.

    You can also get some help from your playerbase!

    Encourage players to report typos and mistakes as they find them. As long as you provide clear instructions for submitting typos, you’re sure to get some useful feedback from your game’s loyal fans.

    3. Avoid forcing reactions from PCs, especially if it’s an RP game

    It’s important to remember that writing for a roleplaying game is different from writing fiction.

    In a roleplaying context, the reader generally expects to have control over the thoughts and feelings of their character. Thus, you want to avoid writing descriptions that infringe upon their ability to roleplay their character’s reactions as they see fit.

    For example, consider the following sentences:

    1. The sight of the waterfall takes your breath away.
    2. The sight of the waterfall is enough to take one’s breath away.

    They’re pretty similar, right? But there’s a key difference.

    #1 assumes that everyone who sees the waterfall will be affected by it and forces that reaction on the reader. It ignores the fact that the player’s character might be stoic or unaffected by romantic scenery.

    #2 conveys the same sentiment but leaves it up to the reader whether their character actually has their breath stolen.

    While this might seem like a minor distinction, it’s fairly important in roleplay-focused MUDs. Players may be offended if you assume their character will be cowering and afraid, filled with sadness, instantly enamored, and so on.

    To write excellent room descriptions for this group, build rooms that evoke responses but don’t assume them!

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    Every character is different and experiences emotion in their own way. When writing for a roleplaying context, it’s best to leave the reactions up to the players and their characters.

    4. Follow the rule of “show, don’t tell”

    Outside of gaming, the “show, don’t tell” rule is a tool used by writers to help them focus on imagery and compelling descriptions.

    But because roleplay MUDs are writing games based in text, the rule fits well here, too.

    The rule has an added benefit in that it can help you become more aware of and avoid “meta” situations in your writing, even if it means you need to do a little telling to do so.

    For example, consider the following descriptions:

    1. Ten Mile Forest is dark and gloomy with hardly any gaps in the canopy.
    2. Hardly any light filters through the dense forest canopy, creating wells of shadow amid the trees’ craggy trunks. A battered signpost reads, “Ten Mile Forest” in faded yellow paint.

    Okay, so these descriptions are very clearly different!

    #1 is an example of telling. I’ve told the reader that the forest is dark and gloomy instead of demonstrating it. I’ve also told the reader the name of the forest, even though their character might not have any way of knowing that information.

    #2 is an example of showing and a little bit of telling. I’ve left it to the reader to surmise that the forest is dark and perhaps a bit gloomy. By including the signpost, I’ve avoided meta-sharing the name of the forest. Instead, I’ve given the character a reason to know that information, too.

    This not only makes the description more immersive but helps the player avoid unintentional metagaming.

    5. Include something unique

    Last but not least, I like to include something unique in each room description. Even if it’s just a tiny detail, something that sets it apart from the rooms around it.

    This tip might seem a bit more in the realm of personal preference, but if you want players to read your descriptions, you need to give them a reason.

    If all of your rooms are the same copy-pasted lines, players will move through them with the same amount of care you put into the copy-pasting effort. Meaning: next to none.

    That might be fine if your game is a hack-and-slash with very little roleplay or immersion.

    If you want your game to be immersive and story-focused, however, unique features and details are a must for capturing players’ attention and fueling their imagination. They’ll expect to be intrigued, so don’t bore them with too many copy-pasted repeats!

    At the same time, keep it concise.

    Every room should have enough detail in it to support a roleplay scene, but that doesn’t mean every description needs to be three paragraphs of lengthy prose. Try to find that Goldilocks “just right” level that works best for your game and your playerbase.

    Write room descriptions that are accessible

    In addition to the above, it’s also important to consider the roles of color and ASCII in your writing.

    You want to write excellent room descriptions for everyone, right?

    Remember: if you’re using color alone to call out certain features, you’ll be placing blind players at a disadvantage. Their screen readers won’t be able to pick up on your visual hints.

    Similarly, if you’re using a lot of non-alphanumeric characters in your room titles and descriptions (as bookends and borders), you could be inadvertently spamming screen readers.

    Sometimes, it’s best to keep things simple and focus on the writing rather than the visual effects!

    See also: building a more accessible MUD and implementing accessibility improvements for more tips.

    Ideas to help you write excellent room descriptions

    Now that we’ve gone over the do’s and don’ts of writing great room descriptions, it’s time to get those creative juices flowing!

    Below, I’ve compiled some things to think about while brainstorming rooms and areas.

    These can be especially helpful if you’re struggling with writer’s block or need a fresh perspective on a project.

    The 5 basic senses

    One way to start is by considering the 5 basic senses and how to include them in your individual descriptions:

    • Sight. What visual features are present in the room or the area at large? Think both big and small, close and distant. Don’t forget to consider lighting conditions! Do any particular colors stand out?
    • Sound. What sounds are audible? Birds chirping? Vehicles passing? People conversing? The hum of machinery, or the clink of cutlery?
    • Taste. Is there a taste on the air? Taste and smell are closely related, so descriptions for these can be interchangeable at times. For example, the air might taste metallic if there’s a lot of blood.
    • Smell. What odors, scents, or aromas are present? The word “odor” usually comes with a negative connotation – it’s something unpleasant. The word “aroma” usually comes with a positive connotation – it’s something pleasant, often associated with food. The word “scent” is fairly neutral.
    • Touch. Is the character moving through rough terrain? Does the sand make travel difficult? Is there soft moss on the rocks? Even if it’s not something the character will actually touch, this is a chance to consider various textures in the room.

    Try closing your eyes and imagining yourself in the place you’re trying to describe. You may be surprised by what comes to mind!

    Features of city rooms

    Photo of a downtown cityscape at night.

    Here are some features to think about when describing city/town/village rooms and areas:

    • Local population. Is the area sparse or crowded? Does it have any unique cultural features? How are people dressed? What languages do they speak? Are they generally well-off or poor or something in-between? Are there beggars asking for scraps? Religious types on their way to the local temple? Children playing in the street?
    • Businesses and institutions. What do people do for a living in this part of town? Are there advertisements for goods and services? Hawkers? Pawn shops, offices? Hospitals, hotels? Blacksmiths? Fixers? What about things like schools, courthouses, and crematoriums?
    • Vehicles and transportation. How do people get around? Flying cars, horse-drawn carriages, buggies? Are there elevated trains or subways? Skywalks, sidewalks, or paths? Is everyone able-bodied, or does your setting include people in need of assistance?
    • Refuse and sewers. Is there trash, and if so, is it everywhere or only in some places? What does it smell like? Look like? Paper litter, plastic? Fast food wrappers? Dung? Are there flies?!
    • Entertainment. What do people do for fun? Fight in the gladiator arena? Go to the movies? Take a stroll in the park? Visit the casino?
    • Animals and greenery. Speaking of parks, are there any? Flower pots? Trees along the sidewalks and front lawns? What about common pets or stray animals? Birds?
    • Lighting. How do people see when it’s dark? Do they need torches or braziers? Lampposts? Can people see the stars at night, or is it like living in Chicago, where the sky is a dull orange glow all the time?
    • Architecture and building materials. You don’t need to be an expert in period architecture to write excellent room descriptions, but it’s good to have a general sense for design and building materials. Are buildings made of glass, steel, iron, wood, or plastic? Are the structures rigid with lots of harsh angles? Rounded and domed? Made of natural materials and designed to blend in? Roofing is something we often take for granted but is essential for providing shelter. Is it thatched? Shingled? Tiled?
    • Food and water. Two more essentials we often take for granted.
    • Decoration. Statues, wrought iron, fountains, and monuments, if outdoors? Paintings and other art, if indoors? What about drapes and wall coverings? Expensive and rare or cheap and abundant? What about upholstery, luxury fabrics, and other items with texture and social significance?
    • Alleyways and hidey holes. Cities can be dangerous! Are there places for someone to slip away and lay low? Take shortcuts? Potentially get mugged? Are there fences or walls separating properties? Things for characters to climb?

    Features of wilderness rooms

    Photo of a picturesque stream with mountains in the background.

    Wilderness rooms can be hard to write, as it might feel like you’re describing the same thing over and over. Hopefully, these ideas can help:

    • Trees. Deciduous, evergreen. Old, young. How many rings? Groves, stands, knotty, roots, thick bark, smooth, silvery. Learn about leaf morphology for more terms and ideas! Is the tree cover heavy or sparse? (When I write about trees, I always end up thinking about My Side of the Mountain…)
    • Flowers and herbs. Color, shape, scent, abundance. Can they be used for food? Rare and exotic or commonplace? Poisonous or medicinal?
    • Animals. Whatever your setting calls for! Think about herd animals, carnivores, rodents, raptors, predators, and prey. Don’t forget insects, too!
    • Insects and spiders. Actually, these guys deserve their own bullet point. Think: ants under rocks, dragonflies near water, grubs in the soil, etc.
    • Inanimate objects. Rocks and boulders, cliffs, overhangs, bluffs, loose shale. Underbrush, branches, humus, peat.
    • Ruins. Did a family or civilization inhabit the area, once upon a time? What evidence did they leave behind? Structures, crumbled walls, firepits, rusted tools, rotted fences?
    • Food and water. Where can characters get it? Is it abundant or scarce? Wild fruit, berries, roots, grains, and veggies.
    • Dangers. Jagged cliffs, a difficult river crossing? Loose rock? Hunters’ traps? Think about the dangers characters might face while traversing the area!

    Think of the 5 basic senses when writing about the above. For example, the smell of loam or sulfur springs or the sound of rustling branches.

    Getting help from AI

    Did you know you can use ChatGPT to help you with room description prompts? Not only that, but you can get AI to write entire sample descriptions for you.

    These tricks can be incredibly helpful if you’re short on ideas, struggling with writer’s block, want complete examples to work from, or if you have aphantasia and need help with imagery.

    Aphantasia is the inability to visualize or recall sensory information, such as taste, touch, or sound. An estimated 4% of people have aphantasia.

    If you don’t have an OpenAI account yet, you’ll need to sign up for one, first.

    Once you’re logged into the system, open up a new chat and try giving the AI some instructions!

    Here are a few tips to help you get a head start:

    • tell it how many room descriptions you want at a time (e.g. “write me 5 room descriptions for a medieval fantasy multi-user dungeon”)
    • specify the desired length of each description (e.g. “write 2-3 sentences per description”)
    • describe the setting (e.g. “make each room describe part of a haunted forest”)
    • tell it what kind of mood, ambiance, tone, or style you want (e.g. “make it sound eerie, to give the reader the chills”)
    • give it some example details to focus on (e.g. “write about things like decaying bark, swampy areas, skittish wild animals, shifting shadows”)

    When giving the AI instructions, the more specific you can get, the better.

    Type all of your parameters out in the chat box, then hit enter and watch as the magic happens!

    But don’t worry – if something came out not-quite-right, you can simply say, “Write the third description again, but this time focus on XYZ.” Or whatever it is you want it to fix.

    The AI will know what you mean and will generate a new paragraph for you, taking into account the instructions you provided.

    Example input and outputs for a cyberpunk MUD

    Here’s an example I did just to see how well ChatGPT would understand my request and fulfill the parameters.

    For instance, would it know that when I say “room description” I don’t actually mean a room in a building?

    This is what I entered into the chatbox (I decided to go with a cyberpunk theme):

    Write me 5 descriptions for 5 different "rooms" in a multi-user dungeon. The MUD is a cyberpunk game. The room descriptions should describe a noisy, crowded, dirty street in a futuristic, dystopian city. Describe things like smells, people, businesses, etc. Use 4-5 sentences per description. Use a tech noir style.

    Because cyberpunk has been around for decades, I can guess that the AI will have a pretty good idea of the kinds of details that would fit the bill.

    And here’s what ChatGPT gave me:

    1. The Neon Alley:
      In this dimly lit stretch of asphalt, shadows dance with pulsating neon lights that flicker from the countless holographic billboards lining the walls. The acrid scent of burnt circuits lingers in the air as the thrum of hovercars echoes through the narrow passage. Lone figures draped in tattered trench coats and fedoras lurk in the corners, their faces hidden by augmented reality masks. The street is alive with the chaotic symphony of jacked-in street vendors peddling illegal cybernetic enhancements, their loud hawking intermingling with the low hum of malfunctioning cybernetic implants from weary pedestrians. A flickering sign above a dingy noodle bar promises comfort in a world long forgotten.
    2. Vapor’s Haven:
      A dense fog of smog hangs over the street, suffocating the flickering streetlights attempting to cut through the haze. People scuttle by, their faces obscured by respiratory masks, their eyes reflecting a constant wariness. Dilapidated shops with faded signs offer holographic projections of illicit VR dens and virtual companions for hire. A cacophony of synthetic beats escapes the hidden doorways, each bass thump vibrating through the concrete underfoot. The pungent odor of synthetic chemicals and stale sweat fills the air, a reminder of the desperate pleasure seekers who’ve surrendered themselves to the embrace of illicit stimulants.
    3. The Chrome Bazaar:
      A sprawling marketplace of makeshift stalls stretches out before you, each one overflowing with a dizzying array of tech gadgets and bootlegged cyberware. The discordant symphony of competing advertisements blasts through every available speaker, merging into a disorienting cacophony. Ragged, cybernetically enhanced peddlers aggressively hawk their wares, their robotic limbs glinting in the harsh neon glow. The scent of overheated machinery mingles with the tang of rotting refuse, a constant reminder of the city’s decay. Hidden among the stalls, the faint whispers of secretive deals and shady information brokers permeate the air, reminding you that every transaction comes at a price.
    4. The Electric Crossroads:
      At the intersection of two main arteries, a web of tangled cables hangs overhead, pulsing with electricity. The steady drizzle of acidic rain hisses as it collides with the exposed wires, creating an eerie symphony of crackling sparks. Shadowy figures huddle beneath rusted scaffolding, their eyes reflecting the dull glow of streetlamps and the occasional flicker of faulty cybernetic implants. Dimly lit storefronts offer respite from the rain-soaked chaos, their windows adorned with illegal braindance chips and black market data cartridges. The overpowering smell of ozone and damp concrete assaults your senses, as if the city itself is crying out in agony.
    5. The Alley of Lost Dreams:
      A narrow, winding alleyway stretches before you, its concrete walls adorned with graffiti, each stroke of vibrant paint telling tales of rebellion and defiance. The gutters overflow with discarded dreams and crushed aspirations, mingling with the scent of stale alcohol and charred wires. Homeless souls huddle together, wrapped in tattered blankets, their augmented limbs gleaming in the scant light that filters through the towering skyscrapers. Flickering neon signs overhead offer fleeting glimpses of hope: from seedy body modification clinics promising a new identity to underground resistance movements seeking to topple the corrupt regime. In this forgotten corner of the city, the air crackles with desperation and the ghostly whispers of forgotten souls.

    Note how I didn’t even ask for room titles, but it gave me some anyway. The AI knew what I meant when I said I wanted room descriptions for a multi-user dungeon.

    (Pretty cool, but no surprise there, either. MUDs have been around for decades, too.)

    While these titles and descriptions may not be perfect, they do give me some ideas and examples to work from and improve upon.

    If you enjoy cyberpunk as a theme, check out my post on AwakeMUD CE. AwakeMUD is a Shadowrun-inspired game and is a good fit for players who enjoy collaborative storytelling.

    A word of caution when using AI

    And that brings me to my final point: the examples above are just a starting point – they’re not the be-all-end-all.

    While they’re admittedly better written and less typo-laden than many human-generated descriptions I’ve read over the years, I wouldn’t settle for that as the standard.

    AI can be a helpful tool that makes your life easier, but don’t let the convenience make you forget who you’re writing for – and why.

    Ultimately, you’ll want to take inspiration from what you do like and what does work and keep going. Keep honing your descriptions, and they’ll be more than “good enough” – they’ll be excellent.

    And that’s all for now! Thanks for reading, and I hope you found this guide on how to write excellent room descriptions helpful. 💜

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    Frequently Asked Questions

    What makes a room description great?

    An excellent room description does more than just tell players what they see. It engages the senses, sets the mood, and offers interactive elements that can be crucial to gameplay.

    What makes it great will come down to your audience, however. If you’re writing for an audience of roleplayers or people looking for a story-driven experience, you may want to spend more time on the details.

    How long should a room description be?

    The ideal length of a room description can vary depending on the importance of the room, your audience, and the level of detail you want to include.

    However, it’s generally a good idea to keep it concise yet informative. As a starting point, aim for about 50-100 words for standard rooms. For more significant or complex areas, you might go up to 200 words.

    Can I use AI to help write room descriptions?

    Absolutely, and it’s a game-changer! AI can help you write thematic room descriptions that fit the tone and setting of your game.

    You can use AI tools to brainstorm ideas or even to write full sample descriptions to work from. Just remember to review and adjust the AI-generated content so that it fits the style you’re aiming for – and your intended audience.

    What are CYOAs and how do room descriptions apply?

    CYOA stands for “Choose Your Own Adventure.” These are interactive stories where the reader makes choices that affect the outcome. Room descriptions in CYOAs serve the same purpose as in MUDs: they set the scene and offer choices for interaction.

    The key difference is that CYOAs are often more linear, focusing on story progression, while MUDs offer a more open-world experience.

    How can I write room descriptions for players with aphantasia?

    Abstract or flowery language can be confusing for players with aphantasia, so it may be better to limit the amount of imagery you use and stick to straightforward descriptions for anything important.

    Also, most people with aphantasia can visualize some senses better than others, so including a variety (touch, taste, scent, sound) may help ensure they still have an immersive experience.

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    About the author

    Andruid is a writer, roleplayer, storyteller, and nerd who tries to live by Bill and Ted wisdom, i.e. “Be excellent to each other.”